Lights flickered around me as if I was as if I was the only one there. The mixed smell of fast foods and gasoline, made my stomach turn. posters of advertisement were stamped Just like teenagers room. Only this was bigger than four walls, and out side too. the width of the streets looked wide, as if there trying to keep the other half of the city away.The sound of music mixed, with television programs, mixed with cars on the street made my head spin. The color of the whole city looked like a toxic fish trying to warn Its predator not to touch. taxi caps in the color of the sun rode down the streets. People walked In a path like a school of fish. You could see glimpse of the sky at the end of the two divided streets. The building were filled with mirrors as if they were made out of it. Lights shone into the light as if they them selfs were stars. Buildings store at each other like dead stone. The sky high buildings filled with darkness they made the smaller ones shine. only if I could stay here for ever. The color of the sky added a little peace with its cool color. Twenty-four-seven this is how the city sounds and feels to me.
2 comments:
Great job with very limited adjectives and adverbs. I love the picture and how you were able to grasp the concept of how sanity is hard to find in concrete buildings. The descripition fit the picture and the light captivated me. The part of fast food and gasoline put me right in the picture and I could feel the city around me.
Way to be descriptive! You did a really good job of using the limited adjectives and adverbs. My favorite line was "posters of advertisement were stamped Just like teenagers room". Since I'm a teenager, along with most of the other readers, we can all really relate to this. The only negative part was that you might have gone a little overboard with the whole describing part.. but thats not even a bad thing since that was our assignment!
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